Quote: sootyj @ September 18 2008, 7:17 PM BSTAlso if you're writing for TV, wanking will shove you well after the watershed.
Very good point, Sootyj - also narrowing the market.
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Quote: random @ September 18 2008, 8:27 PM BSTMarc P, re: gutted. well feeling gutted but kinda expected just that. i kinda hoped you would of give a wee bit of a thumbs up but did expect not.
i much appreciate your honesty from the word go (as that of others),
i'm more than happy to take it on the chin if its explained why, which you have done
re: the hundreds and hundreds of people
if i think about that too much it'll put me off
Well those hundreds don't have the benefit of my advice remember! Lol.
But seriously it is your script, your vision. The only people you should write to please are yourself and your audience,
let us know how you get on with it,
Marc
Quote: random @ September 18 2008, 8:27 PM BSTcards on table, if i was ever lucky enough to get anywhere with this i'd want it to be filmed on location not studio. plus no laughter track, i seriously don't want to go down that road.
don't want to sound a nob or anything but (again if it ever comes to anything) i'd expect an after 9pm slot.
cards on table, if I was ever lucky enough to get anywhere with Helen Bonham-Carter, I would like her to wear a tight-fitting black leather mini-dress, no bra, just a thong at twilight, suspenders, fish-net stockings and stiletto heels. If she offered me drinks, fine – but drugs, no – I seriously don't want to go down that road.
I don't want to sound a knob or anything but (again if it ever comes to anything) I'd expect her to be sitting on my face by 9pm. 
lololol 
Morrace, loved that! did make me laugh 
cheers marc p, advice always appreciated
'your script, your vision', indeedy do
keep you's posted
Why not keep that idea, but use it as a conversation between DEANO and another postie back at the sorting office?
You know, like this:
DEANO:
You'll never guess what I saw on my rounds.
POSTIE:
What?
DEANO:
Well, I ... (then get Deano to explain it)
That way, you don't have the visual wanking scene that may put off some producers.
And you introduce Deano and his mate, coz, surely he's gonna have a mate right?
thx Mikey J,
had also thought something similar this morning, however i'm pretty sure the wanking scene would work as it stands. i mean, we are not talking about seeing this blokes face on pulling like a good 'en. a from behind shot with shirt on and hanging down covering a large % of his arse & arm movement, thats it, well obviously we do see the trousers round his ankles n' pants round knees, but...
surely its not that bad, is it???
Quote: random @ September 19 2008, 3:15 PM BSTthx Mikey J,
had also thought something similar this morning,
Maybe you had been reading this.
'People always say show don't tell. Not in the sitcom. Sitcom, studio based sitcom anyway, is eighty percent dialogue to 20 percent action. And studio sitcom is the funniest. So look at your scene, make it anecdotal in the workplace and character driven and, I reckon, it will be the far, far better for it. There is a crash between reality and comedy reality sometimes and in the sitcom you don't want real reality, as it were, intruding into your created world. The scene could work as you have written it, but not as a first scene, perhaps, and with a bit of work. But hey that's the point of critique if you are unsure. '
lol, you've got to hand it to this Mr. Marc P chap
Of course 'show don't tell' in the sitcom, too. But in this context I fancy the reader will prefer it in the anecdotal way, but then again it is not enough to just relate the story, it has to be realted in a way that changes the story or our perceptions of the characters. That is to say something should happen within the scene more than just the telling of a funny story.
Sorry MarkP, I didn't see that.
Great minds think alike, and all that jazz.
Quote: Mikey J @ September 19 2008, 4:22 PM BSTSorry MarkP, I didn't see that.
Great minds think alike, and all that jazz.
Yeah and I'd forgive you if you spelled my name right!
Quote: Marc P @ September 19 2008, 4:14 PM BSTOf course 'show don't tell' in the sitcom, too. But in this context I fancy the reader will prefer it in the anecdotal way, but then again it is not enough to just relate the story, it has to be realted in a way that changes the story or our perceptions of the characters. That is to say something should happen within the scene more than just the telling of a funny story.
still unsure which way to go on this, but again good advice given, thx
I assume by the,'cheers mum, yeah ok, I'll see you later.' that the postie lives with his mum. Or does he live elsewhere and just visit mum to do the odd job (cut grass etc), now and then?
you assume correctly morrace, but i also assume you know that anyhow!
Quote: Marc P @ September 19 2008, 4:28 PM BSTYeah and I'd forgive you if you spelled my name right!
Arghhhhh MarcP