this is a scene i wrote to open episode 2 of my series "The Best Years of Our Lives". anyways, give it a read and tell me what you think.
PS: i gave my script to my old video production teacher and he loved it. me and my brother held an audition and are currently filming it. i'll post the video when it's done.
EXT. OUTSIDE SCHOOL - DAY
BEN and Alex are standing out side the school. They’re waiting for someone.
ALEX
Maybe he’s not coming.
BEN
He’ll be here, trust me.
Suddenly ROY comes tearing around the corner on his bike. He appears to be riding a girl’s bike. He skids to a halt.
ALEX
Is that a girl’s bike?
ROY
When you called I didn’t have time to get home, so I confiscated a little girls bike.
BEN
You stole a little girl’s bike?
ROY
Desperate times call for desperate measures. So what’s the emergency?
BEN
Well, we were walking by the school, minding our own business when we saw someone break into the school.
ALEX
We new we had to call someone and we immediately thought of you.
ROY
There’s an intruder inside the school?
ROY pushes himself against the wall and peers through the window.
ROY (CON’D)
You boys were right to call me. Have you alerted the authorities?
BEN
Well yeah, but they could be a while.
ROY
True. Looks like I’ll have to go in my self. You boys stay out here, this could get ugly.
ALEX
We wouldn’t think of it.
ROY takes a deep breath and then kicks the door in screaming and runs into the school.
ALEX
Have we gone too far?
BEN
Probably… But it’s Roy.
ALEX
Good point.
Just then a police car pulls in. Two cops come it with they’re guns drawn.
COP
Is the perp still inside?
BEN
Yeah. Be ready, he looks pretty dangerous.
The cops move into the school.
ALEX
So… what should we do now?
BEN
Homework?
The both start laughing and walk away. The cops come out of the school dragging
ROY.
ROY
Its not me, I swear! The real intruder is still in there!
A little girl comes over and kicks ROY in the shin.
GIRL
Jerk!
She takes her bike back and rides away.
END
