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Prankenstein's Monster
Pretty good, but that fab title deserves more.
Maybe a cartoon?
David Brent inspired me thinks.
Quote: sootyj @ June 19 2008, 2:11 PM BSTPretty good, but that fab title deserves more.
Maybe a cartoon?
Yeah, I was pretty happy with that title.
Quote: Sofa_Matt @ June 19 2008, 2:19 PM BSTDavid Brent inspired me thinks.
Did The Office do a Miss Carriage gag? Or do you mean that it's a 'cringe humour' piece?
No sorry, in style rather than content. It was so close though I could actually see some brentisms in your face. Still funny regardless, sorry I forgot to mention that before!
Quote: Sofa_Matt @ June 19 2008, 2:31 PM BSTNo sorry, in style rather than content. It was so close though I could actually see some brentisms in your face. Still funny regardless, sorry I forgot to mention that before!
I'll hold off on growing that goatee then. Cheers!
loved it. reminded me of teenage japes asking if mr wall, mrs wall etc were there.
I liked it.
Maybe I'd have removed the suppresion of the small involuntary grins as you were dialling, that is if you were planning on playing it dead-pan. Either that or go the other way and smile as if sharing the anticipation with the viewer before the moment happens. At present it's stuck between the two. And maybe I'd have been tempted to trim out 15+ seconds for what's essentially a one-line gag.
Apart from that, another good performance, Sir.
Quote: SlagA @ June 19 2008, 2:49 PM BSTI liked it.
Maybe I'd have removed the suppresion of the small involuntary grins as you were dialling, that is if you were planning on playing it dead-pan. Either that or go the other way and smile as if sharing the anticipation with the viewer before the moment happens. At present it's stuck between the two. And maybe I'd have been tempted to trim out 15+ seconds for what's essentially a one-line gag.
Apart from that, another good performance, Sir.
Cheers. The grin was quite voluntary though. I wanted it to begin like I was having fun to contrast the awkwardness to come. As to the timing, yeah, maybe it could have been a mite shorter but I think it would have lost its 'naturalistic' look if it was too rushed. A minute and five of my face isn't too much to bear is it?
Quote: David Bussell @ June 19 2008, 2:53 PM BSTA minute and five of my face isn't too much to bear is it?
Now how am I going to answer that without looking mean or gay eh? 
SlagB says I managed to look both.
Quote: SlagA @ June 19 2008, 3:00 PM BSTNow how am I going to answer that without looking mean or gay eh?
SlagB says I managed to look both.
A mean gay? Like that Ainsley Harriot?
I enjoyed the performance, but yes maybe a few seconds could be trimmed.
Made me laugh out me mouth, very good. I disagree that it was too long, it felt right to me, Im not sure where you could really have trimmed it.
Re cuts: I'd have perhaps done a dissolve cut to excise the dialling section or maybe even started the whole thing with the actor's ear to phone, with the phone already ringing, while delivering a conspiratorial line like "Get this, this'll be great" - a cheeky Mr Bussell grin just before the phone is picked up and his great acting would have told us we were in for a prank call.
But I've always been way too keen with the editing scissors. It's a bit of a personal failing.
I'm still awed by an excellent performance, Sir. Never enough Bussell is the answer.
Thank you both. The next sketch will just be me staring wistfully into the camera. For two hours.