Best Mates

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EDIT : FINAL DRAFT
The cameras would film in a Peep Show style ie; the camera is the eye of the character speaking.

EXTERIOR : NIGHT

Two young lads - Pete & Kev - are worse for drink and walking past a nightclub.

PETE: - C'mon Kev let's go in there

KEV: - Ha ha, yeah sorted

They approach a rather seriously large bouncer on their route to the entrance and he stops them.

BOUNCER: You're not coming in, you're pissed

PETE: Aw c'mon mate we just wanna have some fun

BOUNCER: I said no now piss off

PETE: C'mon you ugly bastard let us in

The bouncer picks PETE up off the floor by his shirt and is about to admonish him for a final time when he realises that PETE is pissing himself and he drops him to the floor. Before he can administer a punishment he turns to his left and sees KEV, cock in hand, pissing on his leg.

BOUNCER: [Looking angrier than ever] What the f**k?

KEV: [Smiling broadly] He's my best mate, we do everything together

He turns to the right still grinning and a fist flies straight into his face.

The picture goes black and a gruff dismebodied voice utters : So do we mate!

Works for me. It stands complete as it is, however, would have liked to have seen a colleague of the bouncer grab Kev or something, (ie., We too do everything together), just so that the drunks don't get the last laugh.

I like the idea, but it's maybe to normal a situation?

Also has he got his flys down, or is his prostate so muscular he can piss through his trousers and onto the bouncer?

Quote: sootyj @ May 27 2008, 9:12 PM BST

I like the idea, but it's maybe to normal a situation?

Also has he got his flys down, or is his prostate so muscular he can piss through his trousers and onto the bouncer?

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It was just a spur of the moment sketch so I could break my duck but if you are holding somebody close to you and they have pissed themselves it wouldn't take you long to realise it Also the prostate would make him do an entirely different mess in his pants

Oh it's a good skit.

Thanks for all the helpful comments and for the end suggestion to Danny - final draft at top of page.