Inspired by Bussell

2 EXECUTIONERS AND CONDEMNED MAN ARE ON A GALLOWS, THERE IS A NOOSE AROUND THE CONDEMNEDS NECK.

E1

Sonny the slicer Cher, you are sentenced to death for Dog Bating, Cat Napping, and murder. Any final words?

MAN

I dun become a Budhist, and amma coming back as a venereal crab, I'm gonna bite your balls screw.

E1

Carry out the sentence, and may God have mercy on your rotten soul.

E2 PULLS THE LEAVER, AND THE MAN DISAPEARS DOWN A TRAP DOOR.

HE THEN BOUNCES BACK UP, IT WOULD APPEAR THE NOOSE IS MADE OF BUNGEE CHORD.

E2

Wrong rope.

E1

I think so dumb ass, oh maybe we'll get lucky and he'll die of diziness.

MAN

Wheeee!

I think there's definitely some scope in replacing the rope for bungee. Not sure what though. Maybe bouncing back up and smashing his brains out on the gallows just as he think's he's going to survive?

I agree with Afinkawan. The idea's solid enough but the ending is unsatisfactory. An ending like the one suggested would be preferable, only it would be difficult to show the prisoner's glee at escaping death in time for a bounce back up again. Were it a cartoon you could cheat the physics though.

Inspired by? Pretty much a straight steal.

Whatever next - a firing squad that fires water at the prisoner...

Quote: Barbs @ May 6 2008, 3:04 PM BST

Inspired by? Pretty much a straight steal.

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lol - that what i thought.

how about a guillotine that miraculously doesn't chop the guys head off....only for the executioner to rip off their cloak and shout TADA - debbie mcgee styleee

I thought that this was a nice grisly form of execution.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Scaphism

Some times the feed back on critique is a little unhelpful.

The clue was in the title. There are no truly original skits, some are closer related to others. I read David' and thought ooh that's a good idea, what variations can you make?

Hence diferent method of execution, different punchline, and pun based introduction.

A variant, otherwise it's like refusing to see Star Wars, cos you saw 2001 there both Scifi films set in space, therefore one's an rip off.

I don't mind this kind of feedback, you put stuff up, you take the flak.

But an occasional qualative statment, good or bad, is in my view not too much to ask.

Excellent! The dialogue is particularly choice. Ignore the naysayers on this one soots.

If it's qualitative you wanted then I think it was generally good. maybe better dialogue for the crimes and the Bhudist and pubic louse bits.

Issue I have with it, as David's, is that I found the subject matter a bit distasteful.

I'm normally quite liberal as to what I think can be classed as funny but for some reason both examples made me feel quite sick: Maybe just not my 'cup of tea' as a comedy subject.

Maybe you were executed in a past life.

I knew you'd come up with that 'there are no truly original sketches' line.

You're right that everything has been inspired by something else, but usually the inspiration is quite subconcious and used to take the new material in a different direction.

To read something on a forum, then do a not so funny version only minutes later really isn't adding anything to David's idea. Why not let David have his idea and praise it (because it was awesome btw) rather than think - ooh, that's a good area to plunder.

ANd as for the lack of critique in my post - what do you expect? Yes it's ok, but that's because the original was so good.

I just don't think anyone should take someone's idea and do what is almost an exact copy. It will stop people posting things for crit if they think it will get used in someone else's material...

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Yes Barbs, providing skits inspired by others will kill off all original comedy.

Soon we will be living in a post comedic hell, and I'll have been the Openheimer.

You put stuff up to share ideas, and if you're an original productive writer, you keep writing.

I've worked with some other writers on skits for stage shows, and they've gone onto compete with me.

Frankly who cares, if it's getting more good stuff out there, and imrpoving my work whilst I'm at it. Great.

I always say share, make the whole cake bigger, not just your slice.

Stop being obtuse. As I said, eveything has influences - be it comedy, art, music or whatever.

But you have to use the influence as a starting point, not just to change x and y in the joke.

Imagine David and you sent your jokes off to a radio show and only yours got used - would that be fair? In my mind, absolutely not.

Anyway, would love to chat but I'm off to record a song. It's called Don't Look Back in Bangor.

Quote: Barbs @ May 6 2008, 3:04 PM BST

Inspired by? Pretty much a straight steal.

Whatever next - a firing squad that fires water at the prisoner...

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How is this a steal? The joke is that an incredibly solemn event is undermined by silliness. How many sketches take this as a starting point? Sooty's sketch is not a steal at all.