PC Planet

INT. COMPUTER STORE – DAY

A 'PC WORLD' STYLE TV ADVERT. FLASH GRAPHICS IN RETINA SEARING COLOURS.

DAVE
At PC Planet we're selling the Hitachi Deckstar one terabyte hard drive for only £199.99!

RICHARD
(MONOTONE)
Buy now and get twenty percent off this stylish Samsung Monitor with built in TV tuner.

DAVE
PC Planet!

RICHARD
(MONOTONE)
The computer superstore.

DAVE
What's the matter?

RICHARD
It's just… all you want to do is talk about work.

DAVE
I'm sorry, Richard, but that's who I am. I'm a computer salesman. You know that!

RICHARD
The Dave I met had time for other things.

DAVE
That was back then! It's a cut-throat business now!

RICHARD
There you go talking about work again. I'm talking about us!

DAVE
What do you want me to do? Do you want me to take you out? Let's do it then! Let's go out tonight! Is that what you want?

RICHARD
If you're going to be like that then forget it.

DAVE
I don't get you sometimes, I really don't!

RICHARD
Then get this, Dave, I'm having your baby!

DAVE IS GOBSMACKED. HE TURNS SLOWLY TO THE CAMERA.

DAVE
Special offer until the end of April, this Toshiba satellite laptop, perfect for the home or office!

Bit of a weak punchline in my opinion but still a funny sketch, I do watch those PCworld adverts and think f**king hell they're over excited about there job.

Nice one David.

Not bad, but how about taking the PC World obsessive out of PC World and putting him in other situations? Wouldn't it be funnier if he was still obsessed with PC's etc while visiting his dying mom in the hospice or dealing with a Market Researcher on the street?

Quote: Paul W @ April 17 2008, 1:13 PM BST

Bit of a weak punchline in my opinion but still a funny sketch, I do watch those PCworld adverts and think f**king hell they're over excited about there job.

Nice one David.

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Thanks, Paul. The humour in the punch would be the fear in his eyes as he delivers that last line. Well, that's the way I see it at least.

No I actually liked the punchline. Emphasized his total madness and his loyalty to the job. Idea was topical as well.

Quote: chipolata @ April 17 2008, 1:44 PM BST

Not bad, but how about taking the PC World obsessive out of PC World and putting him in other situations? Wouldn't it be funnier if he was still obsessed with PC's etc while visiting his dying mom in the hospice or dealing with a Market Researcher on the street?

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Good ideas for turning this into a runner. Cheers.

Also, you so realise you're risking sending Aaron into a meltdown with that stray apostrophe in PC's?

Quote: Norman Wisdom @ April 17 2008, 1:47 PM BST

No I actually liked the punchline. Emphasized his total madness and his loyalty to the job. Idea was topical as well.

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Well, as close as I ever come to topical at least...

I'm thinking of deliberately riddling my posts with poor grammer and punctuation just to wind Aaron up. He really does redefine anal.

Quote: chipolata @ April 17 2008, 1:51 PM BST

I'm thinking of deliberately riddling my posts with poor grammer and punctuation just to wind Aaron up. He really does redefine anal.

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He realy dos.