British Comedy Guide

Unsafe Driving Sketch

With a little help from David Bussell:

Int. Car

A man is driving a car. A woman is in the passenger seat. Something thumps against the windscreen and over the top of the car.

Woman: What the FUCK was that?

Man: A fly.

The man turns his windscreen wipers on as blood pours down the windscreen.

Woman: It was a man!

Man: Don't be daft.

Woman: It was 6 foot tall!

Man: Probably one of those European flies.

Another thump against the windscreen.

Man: Bloody things!

The man turns his windscreen wipers on again.

Woman: STOP THE CAR!

Man: It's just a couple of flies!

A loud thump is heard. The car rolls over something.

Woman: STOP THE FUCKING CAR!

Man: (SIGHS)

He puts his foot to the pedal. They screech to a halt.

EXT. HIGH STREET - CONTINUOUS

A swathe of destruction has been cut through a pedestrianised area. Shoppers gasp and weep. The corpse of a man lies right behind the car. The man examines the corpse.

Man: There must be a nest round here.

ENDS

I don't know if you misconstrued my suggestion or chose to go a different way, but my recommendation was to have it that there was a person lying dead in the road behind the car. That makes the last line way funnier don't you think? If you wanted it to be a fly, why have it heading into a the high street at the end? You could keep it on the road and save yourself a bunch of bother.

Yeah there was some miscontrusion. I'll change it before people notice.

Tough bloody windscreen!

Oh yeah. I hadn't thought of that!

Quote: garyd @ April 2 2008, 4:22 PM BST

Tough bloody windscreen!

I think you can get away with it. Maybe have it crack a little.

Quote: garyd @ April 2 2008, 4:22 PM BST

Tough bloody windscreen!

Sorry, missed off the :P

Quote: garyd @ April 2 2008, 4:25 PM BST

Sorry, missed off the :P

I don't get it.

It's not bad, but it's a bit to violent.

Quote: sootyj @ April 2 2008, 4:31 PM BST

It's not bad, but it's a bit to violent.

I guess you could leave out the blood and have the knocked over person groan at the end. Pansy.

Quote: David Bussell @ April 2 2008, 4:28 PM BST

I don't get it.

I didn't get it either at first. I think he meant he missed the smiley off.

Quote: Winterlight @ April 2 2008, 4:32 PM BST

I didn't get it either at first. I think he meant he missed the smiley off.

I see, my bad. Now back to the critique...

Yes, back to the critique:

It's not your best Winterlight.

You've let yourself down and even worse, you've let Bussell down.

Quote: David Bussell @ April 2 2008, 4:28 PM BST

I don't get it.

as in:

"Tough bloody windscreen! :P "

Quote: Winterlight @ April 2 2008, 4:48 PM BST

Yes, back to the critique:

It's not your best Winterlight.

You've let yourself down and even worse, you've let Bussell down.

Hey, I like the sketch. If you don't think it's funny, how about we hop in a car and take a drive?

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