Weeding day...

SCENE ONE.

KITCHEN/BREAKFAST ROOM OF MIDDLE CLASS HOUSE.
TERRY IS SEATED AT TABLE EATING BREAKFAST AND READING PAPER. STEVE ENTERS IN PYJAMAS. BY HIS MANNER AND ACTIONS WE CAN SEE THAT STEVE IS BLIND.

TERRY: Here he is. The man himself. (SINGS) I’m getting married in the morning.

STEVE: (SITTING) This afternoon.

TERRY: Well little bro’ have yourself some breakfast. Then you can have a shower, do you want me to give you a wet shave?

STEVE: Yeah, that’d be nice. Make sure I’m baby smooth for Julie.

TERRY: Right you are. Do you need a hand with your suit?

STEVE: Just the bowtie.

SCENE TWO.

CLOSE UP OF TERRY’S FACE. HE IS CONCENTRATING VERY HARD. HE IS OBVIOUSLY HAVING TROUBLE TYING STEVE’S BOWTIE.

TERRY: Hold your chin up. Are you nervous?

STEVE: No. I’ve got you to look after me. (BEAT) I have to ask. You’re not bitter are you?

TERRY: Look, we both fancied her. We both asked her out. In the end the best brother won. You know what they say, all’s fair in love and war.

TERRY STEPS BACK. HE IS WEARING A FORMAL MORNING SUIT.

There, you look a million dollars.

CUT TO: LONG SHOT OF STEVE. HE IS WEARING A SKY BLUE, VELVET, 1970’S DINNER SUIT WHICH IS SLIGHTLY SMALL. A LIME GREEN SILK SHIRT AND A MAUVE BOWTIE.

STEVE: Thanks. I’m lucky to have a big brother like you.

END

I liked it. The dialogue needs to be a little tighter, but it was a good reveal. I think you could go even further with it to crank up the cruelty.

With the young brother blind, it is just too mean...

Just make him normal, but too 'innocent' to realise that that suit etc is not appropriate.

It's good, and a nice idea. But with short skits, I'd recommender only ever using one scene.

No, it's not too mean.

There's been much meaner things in comedy before. Look at Dumb and Dumber. They sell a dead budgie to a blind kid in that.

Oh and Sooty has a good point. This could be done in one scene.

too be honest i think you would have to be blind to realise that suit was not right! liked it.

I don't care how mean others have been.. This is mean as it is.

Disabled people like to be laughed with, not at. It's obvious that anyone could do this to a blind person at any time, so it isn't really funny.

This would be funnier if the person getting married is the seeing person, but 'innocent' and the person doing the dressing assistance is the blind person.

So you go through the whole scene essentially in close-up and then the camera draws back to reveal that the assisting person is wearing dark glasses and has a white stick, and the groom is clearly a sighted person, but is dressed in these crazy colours.

define "innocent".

Quote: wayne lewis @ March 23, 2008, 5:07 PM

define "innocent".

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I don't really need too, KJS would know what I mean, but in this instant:
innocent = total lack of fashion sense.

Thanks for all the comments and ideas folks...

Bill, for a person to be that "innocent" they'd have to have an IQ of about 3 and then it becomes a gag about poeple with learning difficulties...
If the blind brothre dresses the "innocent" brother it becomes a gag about how cruel a blind people are...

At the moment it's a gag about a brother playing a nasty trick on his younger brother on his wedding day...

kjs

Quote: billwill @ March 23, 2008, 5:05 PM

Disabled people like to be laughed with, not at. It's obvious that anyone could do this to a blind person at any time, so it isn't really funny.

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The point of the joke is that the brother who can see is a jealous bastard. I don't see how it is derogatory to blind people. It states that they can't see, which is fact.

exactly. also it would seem more cruel IMO to have the Blind Brother dress the other brother because then it would come across as the blind brother dressed him like this because he's blind not because he wants revenge. and that would just create a "poor sod. doesn't know what he's doing because he's blind" kind of mentality which is worse.

as it stands at the moment the blind brother has got the girl, therefore has gotten the "better" of his brother, while his brother now comes across as being a spiteful arse for taking revenge, so it just proves to me that the girl chose the right guy. the nice guy brother who happens to be blind.

The joke can be read both ways. The blind brother, is the better, more noble person, and his brother's revenge, proves his weakness. Or that the blind brother, is helpless, and isn't funny how you can take advantage of them.

Because some people are mean enough of spirit, to only see the second one. Shouldn't mean the rest of us are denied the joke, because we see the first version.

Idiots will always find proof for their idiocy. The BNP uses Lord of the Rings as a propaganda film, and people play drinking games to Rain Man.

I could see the joke coming - more than Steve.

Maybe it could be tightened up - like the suit. He would be more than aware if the suit didn't fit. It just has to be ridiculous colours like pink and orange stripes.

This is cruel, but it's also funny. I spat coffee over my keyboard when I read the last line, so it gets my vote.