2 SECRET SERVICE AGENTS ARE STANDING GUARDING A DOOR HAVING A QUIET CHAT.
SS1
The president's seems to be enjoying his new book.
SS2
It's a thriller, this terrorist goes round undermining the government. He's a commie, and a religious fanatic. In the end they catch him, torture him, and execute him.
SS1
I thought he was reading the Bible?
SS2
Are you going to tell him Jesus was the good guy, and Pilot wasn't Jack Bauer?
SS1
Nah he cried too much when he fund out that the goat wasn't real.
I don't get it.
Me neither.
I get it - up to the Goat bit.
Damn, I thought it was really obvious. He's reading Jesus as a villain, and Pilot as a hero. As he thinks torture, and unfair execution great, but preaching love and peace as dangerous.
The goat bit, is a reference to him Reading My Pet Goat, with those school kids on 9/11.
Oh well back to the drawing board.
Still thanks for the feedback, it's a help.
Ironic title under the circumstances.
Quote: sootyj @ March 22, 2008, 4:15 PMThe goat bit, is a reference to him Reading My Pet Goat, with those school kids on 9/11.
Eh???? I still don't understand!
I got the main bit though - but then I have been watching the Passion - and (unless it's another pun) it should be Pilate.
Yeah, leave me out of it.
2 SECRET SERVICE AGENTS ARE STANDING GUARDING A DOOR HAVING A QUIET CHAT.
SS1
The president's seems to be enjoying his book.
SS2
It's a thriller about this terrorist goes round undermining the government in ancient Palestine. He's a commie, and a religious fanatic. In the end they catch him, torture him, and execute him.
SS1
I thought he was reading the Bible?
SS2
He is. He's just convinced Jesus is an insurgent.
Is this better?
Now I know what you're getting at, yes, the second draft is better laid out to make your point. That I didn't understand the joke it is no surprise - I have little interest in your human politics.
Ah you two are part of the invasion fleet?
Rak Nark ning ning
Threep
Soon we will eat their young, and hunt the others for sport!
Quote: sootyj @ March 22, 2008, 5:32 PMSS1
I thought he was reading the Bible?SS2
He is. He's just convinced Jesus is an insurgent.Is this better?
No - I thought the original worked better. Maybe he could be reading the New Testament.
I think the goat bit from the 1st one is far too obscure. I doubt how anyone could appreciate that.
The second one I didn't find funny.
In my opinion, move on. I'm sure you'll come up with a new sketch in no time.
The response reinforces the fact that I think Sootyj only writes sketches for me cos I got all of it even the joke bit. Any way just a technical point you can't been a communist and religious. i'd just emphasise Jesus's religious extremism. e.g. He got the idea for the surge when Judas turned against Jesus etc.