Affair?

Int. House as man unlocks and steps through the door smartly dressed

1st Man: (Calling) Hey babe, i'm home.

1st Man moves into the kitchen to find his wife having sex with another man

1st Man: What the?!

Woman: (seeing her husband) Andrew!

1st Man: What the hell's going on? Who's...wait did you just call me Andrew?

2nd Man: Who's this guy? I thought your husband was in a coma?

Woman: (to 2nd man) It's not what you think Dave!

2nd Man: Well, It looks like...I'm not called Dave.

Woman hesitates

A third male voice is heard from upstairs: Is everything ok? I heard shouting

Woman: Everything's fine Mike, it's the Tv

Pause

3rd Man: Who's Mike?

3rd man enters in towel

1st Man: (to woman) Listen Jenny, I want to know what's going on. Now.

Woman: I'm not called Jenny

Awkward pause

1st Man: Well this is going to take a while. Tea anyone?

END

Cheers for all your comments and 'Steve by any other name' for a punchline.

It needs a better punch line hun.
Man2 punching the husband first is not that funny. IMO!
You need it to end with maybe the husband thanking him (Which is old hat really) or something unusual.

A punch line as a punch line?

Was there a punchline?!

Is it supposed to be that both men think she's having an affair with the other?

Unfortunately this seems to have misinterpreted. It's supposed to be unexpected with the first man punching first, the second man has seen this coming and is one step ahead.
Make any more sense? Constructive criticism is welcome.

Sorry but it's not funny, better luck next time.

It is unexpected, but it's not funny. It's not enough of a twist.

Armstrong and Miller do a great series of sketches about a man who keeps walking in on his wife and his best friend mid-coitus.

Quote: Tarquin Lyn @ March 5, 2008, 8:55 PM

Unfortunately this seems to have misinterpreted. It's supposed to be unexpected with the first man punching first, the second man has seen this coming and is one step ahead.
Make any more sense? Constructive criticism is welcome.

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That was exactly how I read it.
I still think it needs a sharper punch line.

is not a joke, in any way.

Quote: M Lewis @ March 5, 2008, 9:46 PM

is not a joke, in any way.

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It kind of is.

The humour would come from the fact MAN 2 is completely naked, I guess.

Note I said 'would' though. It wouldn't make me laugh.

Nice sig. Brendan Behan too drunk to spell his name.

Perhaps if man two was wearing a bernard matthews turky on his head it would give the line 'What the' a deeper signific**ts

Quote: Seefacts @ March 5, 2008, 9:52 PM

It kind of is.

The humour would come from the fact MAN 2 is completely naked, I guess.

Note I said 'would' though. It wouldn't make me laugh.

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Good point, it could be a running sketch of various situations where nothing funny happens apart from the fact the man is naked

Quote: M Lewis @ March 5, 2008, 10:41 PM

Good point, it could be a running sketch of various situations where nothing funny happens apart from the fact the man is naked

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It worked for Armstrong and Miller.

(Was it them who did lots of bits where they were naked?)