Hi guys, having trouble getting people to read my sit com and scripted work so decided to make some of my own and stick it on YouTube! This is my first ever video and id love some feedback!
My first ever video
As Shakespeare said "What's in a name ?". Thanks to your video, I now know letters are in a name.
Best line: "Ranald? What da fuq kinda name is dat?"
This sketch contains some good material and passable acting but I think it would work best before a live audience who might indulge you more than a video-viewing audience with a back-button. Obviously, for writers/comedians, everything and anything is good material, but making a video in your bedroom about your own name comes across as a trifle narcissistic. Now, if your name was Zbigniew Brzezinski, you might have good reason to feel pissed at people (your parents, mostly).
Suggestion: lose the captions with the "funny" voices -- they take from the whole piece.
Overall, a promising start to your video-sketch career. Keep it up, rAnald!
- Gusto