some yoke
Sunday 21st September 2014 8:23pm
37 posts
I know exactly what you mean I loose all objectivity after the second rewrite of anything.
I seen the clips ran 30 mins plus and decided I wouldn't bother but listened to the Kermit Sketch and I laughed hard -
So listening to the others all your show lacks is:
A theme to frame each episode and some more confidence plus indignation!
Your comic instincts are great but you seem to apologise for the joke -
'I'm not getting him DVD's, I want them to move forward, just get f**king netflicks'
Great line but the uncertain delivery left it a bit flat.
Or in beer; at around 7.25 "it's not fair, your sister, what age is she, your having proper family, I suppose it's the only way she's going to learn about what it's like living in your house hold, but sometimes it crosses me as a bit harsh, but families have their ways"
Or something to that effect, but it's just a stream of subconscious. What are you saying? I think if you played devils advocate to each others ideas it would give it some conflict and up the ante.
Have you ever listened to The Ricky Gervais podcast? It's a great example of sticking to a theme and having opposing points of view throughout. If you listen to it, it seems natural and off the cuff but it's all scripted material, best bits from their old XFM show.