I'm Too Sexy

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Always worth the wait Francis Cleft

Much too cheerful.

Very good, but fix that typo in the key word; when it is first mentioned you misspelled BALD as BOLD, which completely distorted the meaning & threw my mental following of the story off whack and I didn't realise you meant BALD until a few paragraphs later.

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I'm not sure what your target for publication would be.

Reads a bit like the stories they used to put in Readers Digest.

Does Readers Digest still exist?

Quote: billwill @ 23rd August 2014, 12:12 PM BST

I'm not sure what your target for publication would be.

Reads a bit like the stories they used to put in Readers Digest.

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Tumour In (School) Uniform?

Quote: gappy @ 23rd August 2014, 4:23 PM BST

Tumour In (School) Uniform?

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guilty chuckle.

Dear oh dear, this made me laugh like an absolute loon!

I found that very funny as well.

very nice mate. If I was being particularly picky I'd say you could probably cut out about 10 / 15% just to make it a bit more lean, but it's very funny