Am I as funny as I thought?! Page 3

Stephen G have you ever watched comidians such as jimmy car or franky boil some of the jokes they make are unbelievably racist horrible and homophobic but there 2 of the best comidians in the country and they make a killing doing it because mosy people won't take offence cus it's a joke its what comedy is about if every joke was nice and about flowers comedy wouldn't be funny thanks
For the advice but I disagree with it being racist if "I hate niggers" (chris rock) then that's racist but what I said is a joke on the fine line maybe but racist it is not.

You are comparing a Picasso to a child's scrawl. You can't see the difference. When you can,young Padawan, come back with what you have learned if you want to be some kind of pro and it passes the Bernard Manning test - it fails. Telling everyone that flares are cutting edge fashion sadly doesn't make it so.

We're getting bogged down here. tell us a joke without a controversial bit in it (and, yes, even Frankie Boyle does that) and we'll tell you whether it works or not.

Quote: Olliet @ 18th June 2014, 12:51 PM BST

Stephen G have you ever watched comidians such as jimmy car or franky boil some of the jokes they make are unbelievably racist

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Just spent ten minutes or so googling this on the off chance I might be misguided. And in the interst of fairness. But I couldn't find even one.

Can't stand their material by the way, but that's by the by.

Ok here is a different one this I came across about half hour ago haven't tried writing but do think it could be a good joke...

Did anyone see in the news that Japan has only just decided to ban child porn! The Japanese are not happy about this? The japs decided this is a bad idea as there "freedom of expression needs to be protected" really? Just Imagen someone trying to persuade people not to go ahead with this "hey guys were having a really shit time at the moment with our government I only think it's fair we get to watch child porn" But at the same time how will they be able to decipher what ones are children? It's fortunate Japanese just like the French decide not to shave they will have a new rule in Japan... If there's grass on the wicket Shinzo lets you play cricket

Like I said I read the news half hot ago I've just writ this now from the top if my head needs work but is abit different from the other two. Constructive criticism please

Don't write from the top of your head.

Perhaps if you spent a moment or two actually crafting these garbled outpourings, you might get a better response.
As it is - unreadable.

I no I shouldn't but I haven't got the time this moment to sit for hours writing jokes that was just something I just come up with it's not finished and it's not perfect I'm after ways to help improve my jokes that's all it's an idea for a joke

Quote: Olliet @ 18th June 2014, 2:34 PM BST

I no I shouldn't but I haven't got the time this moment to sit for hours writing jokes that was just something I just come up with it's not finished and it's not perfect I'm after ways to help improve my jokes that's all it's an idea for a joke

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Yeah, and I haven't got time to spend hours deciphering them.
Au revoir.

Quote: Olliet @ 18th June 2014, 2:34 PM BST

I no I shouldn't but I haven't got the time this moment to sit for hours writing jokes that was just something I just come up with it's not finished and it's not perfect I'm after ways to help improve my jokes that's all it's an idea for a joke

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What's the idea? I have got time, just waiting to and pick up my free prescription and maybe have a little tickle on the horses.

Your on the critique forum you f**k tard

(Meanwhile get hold of a book called the comic toolbox and read that. You probably wouldn't have got better advice on here than from Lazard by the way or Tony)

Quote: Olliet @ 18th June 2014, 2:40 PM BST

Your on the critique forum you f**k tard

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What's idea I asked? Still keen to hear it. And I have to say you are a very delicate flower for someone who's idea of comedy is to be offensive. Meanwhile read the book. What is a f**ktard by the way?

Yeah I've looked at some of the work tony has done and it's impressive I've messaged him and got some good advice from him

He knows what he is talking about. He probably got the memo about Racism and calling people retards

Marc like I said yesterday you've helped me alot was not aimed at you didn't see your comment till after and f**k + retard = f**ktard