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I refer the honourable gentleman to the question I asked! :)

Quote: Marc P @ 10th June 2014, 10:41 PM BST

I refer the honourable gentleman to the question I asked! :)

and I refer the not so honourable gentleman to my case for the defence . I stand by the fact that a lot of people I have shown those last 2 limerick too have found them very funny . and when may we see evidence of the afformentioned gentlemans work for the prosecution ? we see many posts from him , m'lord ,critiquing work from others, but rarely do we see any of his musings upon which we ourselves can comment !

I posted one a while back in the thread where you invited people to slam you, which unless I misunderstood wasn't a wrestling reference, one never knows with you young folk today. And yes I mainly come here not to be critiqued but to critique. And I sir am far from dishonourable, ask any of the whores from whom I make my living!

Quote: slarnder @ 10th June 2014, 10:11 PM BST

sure , here is one abou james blunt who served in the army in kosavo

there is a singer james blunt
who served on the Kosovo front
he gone from dutiful
to singing you beautiful
oh what a talented chap

There once was a singer called Blunt
Who served on the Kosovo front
But he's changed from being dutiful
To signing... 'You're Beautiful!'
Oh my, what a talented.... chap.

I did . and to be honest , the 78 year old one looks good for her age . they actually said you were really very nice , but that the pension plan you had in place for them was not the best .

Lol actually I shouldn't laugh... She's my wife!

and your version of the blunt limerick is actually very close to my original - the one I posted here was shortened for twitter lol

They all say that. Usually I blame the cold weather;)

nothing like a girl criticising the size of your limerick . thankfully there are not many on here . my first post on here a couple of years ago was for ignatious rake , he wanted a limerick for his online magazine , and he published tis one ;

there once was a girl called anne
who was my number one fan
but I got a shock
when I fealt a cock
and realised anne was a man.

Integral harmony, smut content, pretty good metrical cohesion. Not bad.. Could do with an edit and polish still mind :)

cock....polish.....snigger..

That's racist!

Quote: Marc P @ 11th June 2014, 12:07 AM BST

That's racist!

no I said polish not polish . oh , hang on . NOOOOO I said SNIGGER !! I am not Clarkson in disguise !

I have never seen the two of you in the same place at the same time... Just saying.

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