Hi guys,
Interested to know what you make of this comedy short...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g6mEXd6-pm0
Thanks very much!
Paul x
Give this a watch!
love it, especially the start
Thanks Rupert Nitrogen! Really appreciate it!
I only watched a couple of minutes and I couldn't quite make this one out. Not terrible, but I really couldn't get a grip on what it was about. Something fun in there, but I'd have to examine further.
I was pleasantly surprised to see a Tim Walker lookalike starring in the video as well.
Surprisingly that it exactly what we went for. We set out to make something where the reaction is "its good, but I don't know what it actually was". If you watch it fully you'll hopefully get the full effect of that. So far, we have had people love it and really enjoy it, and we have also had people go out of their way to tell us how much they are annoyed at wasting 9 minutes of their life on it. It's a real crowd divider.
Out of interest, which one is the Tim Walker look a like? We are struggling this end to work it out...
I'd give it a Sekonda but no more sorry. I couldn't get past the the
'Homage' to the guy in the ginger wig from the fast show in the first minute or more. Just a thought, but maybe try scripting something next time?
It's enjoyable and it's got an actual joke in there which is good.
But it's a little bit to frantic and overplayed.
Haha Thanks guys. Can fully understand where you're coming from. It's not to everyone's taste and it's something you have to get on board with. It does end with a lengthy, repetitive and highly unecessary dance routine afterall!
The problem with the dance routine Paul is that you were taking it seriously. I got the strong impression it is something you all do as a bit of a party piece at ... well parties and the pub and whatnot.
It's all in the commitment. If you aren't going to commit whole heartedly to a dance routine then you may as well not spend three week nights rehearsing and a whole afternoon dancing until you get it right.
Successful writing/production all lies in the edit. Killing your babies sometimes too. I want the tip of the iceberg not the whole unwieldy mass of it. The swan powering serenely and majestically up river, I don't need to see the ugly feet pedalling furiously beneath the surface.
...Are you still talking about our dancing?
If something is fundamentally wrong it can present itself in many symptoms. So yes I am talking about the dancing as that is what we were discussing... But as part of the whole of your piece.
okie dokie. Thanks for the tips.
It didn't waste 9 minutes of my life.
It wasted 6 - roughly the amount of time you need to cut out of this to make it sharp.
It's a nice idea - good performances - competently shot.
But WAY too indulgent.
We get the gag pretty quick, so you don't need to bang on so much.
Ironically I was quite charmed by the dance routine.
You could try running the titles over it, followed by some credits - which is what it feels like - a credit sequence.
But lose the bit were it goes to colour and you break up - that sort of 'behind-thes-cenes, out-take vibe is highly self congratulatory and bursts the bubble somewhat.