Speak to the wing governor Jennie but to be honest it's not likely.
Spec script - Door To Door Page 4
Most recently released felons trying to sell bath sponges or fresh fish.
Bit odd really.
Wow. I did not think there would be a badger culling debate going on.
The badger bit is just an example of the types of charities I used to work for. It is almost an innocuous element; though I did like it as a tool to contrast the habitat of Steve.
It was a while ago Sam.
He was joking but Sootyj's released felon concept is a good one.
Apologies for my belatedness.
Belatedness in what? The Cull debate happened months ago?
Quote: Sam Broberg @ 21st May 2014, 10:26 AM BSTThe badger bit is just an example of the types of charities I used to work for. It is almost an innocuous element; though I did like it as a tool to contrast the habitat of Steve.
I think that's the issue - it reminds you of your experience. Brainstorm ten made up charities and make it better. Nothing in sitcom should be innocuous. Plan it.
I'd go with a bland and inoffensive charity.
I'd say the National Trust keep it unfunny and let the characters bounce off of it.
I'm all for critiques but peeps be too negative, they've read to many books Sammy-boy telling them formulas, thinking every thing can be learnt a certain way.
You've posted three scenes - just write what you find funny, not what a book tells you, write what you'd want to watch.
Cheers Curtis. I suppose you'll always get the conservative people.
Yeah I'm all for critiques too. Especially - I don't know - in a thread called critique. And yes 'peeps' in it read too much and shit. What the f**k has reading got to do with writing. So yeah bro ignore advice that doesn't tell you you are an undiscovered genius and just write what you think is funny. It's like any profession like being a doctor or a lawyer. You can waste years of time learning how to do it and get paid nicely or just go out and do it. How hard can it be , I've seen lots of shit on telly.
Sorry if I am being too conservative here Sam but if you want to be more successful at writing in a commercial context than you were at selling , it might behove you when asking for advice in a forum for just such a thing, to remember another sales adage 'you have two ears and one mouth' and remember that ratio. If you just wish to use writing as therapy and a hobby there are a lot of groups and classes. If you want to sell something the same rules apply from a doorknob to a script.
Sometimes tough love here but if you want to be patronised like a child there are better places. Likewise if you just want people to just say you are hilarious and pat you on the back there is Barry and his mates down the pub - but you'll have to get the rounds in first.
It's simple really. If you want to be serious about writing man up and take it seriously.
MP
Not available for private mentoring presently due to laziness issues.
Less competition for the rest of us, Marc!
It always amazes me what delicate little flowers some people are.
Quote: Marc P @ 24th May 2014, 8:39 AM BSTNot available for private mentoring presently due to laziness issues.
I thought feed back on this script for an early draft was quite positive. Good characters, or at least one and strong jokes.
But you're half way there, your plotting is weak and you need more strong characters.
Victory belongs to the persistent.