2525 Galaxy Dating

INTRO:In the future everyone works alone from home and all shopping is delivered by matter transporters, so dating agencies are more popular than ever. Let's take a look inside Galaxy Dating's offices.

WOMAN:Thank you for coming in for a little chat Mr (BEAT) Zorb..a..splurg..beltch..blah...

BARRY:It's pronounced Barry.

WOMAN:Barry?

BARRY:Yes.

WOMAN:Well...Barry. We have had one or two little complaints from the women you have been on 'dates' with.

BARRYh, I am very sorry to hear that.

WOMAN:You are aware that this is a human only dating agency?

BARRY:Yes of course, just lovely tasty humans.

WOMAN:No androids, mutants or shape shifters allowed.

BARRY:I should hope not.

WOMEN:Right, to these complaints then. There was Jane...

BARRY:Ah, nice girl, but a bit salty.

WOMAN:Well she appears to have gone missing. Would you know anything about that?

BARRY:No.

WOMAN:And Lucy, do you remember Lucy?

BARRY:Not sure...

WOMANhe says you licked her face at the restaurant..

BARRY:Is that unusual?

WOMAN:It is with two tongues. And Judith can you remember Judith?

BARRY:Judith, let me think...oh yes, I remember Judith.

WOMAN:Yes and she remembers you...and your six hands.

BARRY:Ah, and she has complained?

WOMANhe certainly has. She is still waiting for you to call her for a second date.

BARRY:Ummm...I don't have anything arranged for dinner tomorrow.

WOMAN:In view of the comments received, I'm afraid I have a legal requirement to ask this next question. Are you sure you are not a shape shifting mutant Barry?

BARRY:Cross my hearts and hope to die!

WOMEN:That's good enough for me. It is hard enough getting men to sign up for dating without losing a handsome specimen like yourself.

BARRYo you think I have a handsome face?

WOMAN:The one on the right yes.

BARRY:Ah, sorry about that (POP) just one, is that better?

WOMAN:Yes, and lose some of the legs.

Quote: playfull @ 28th January 2014, 4:01 PM GMT

WOMAN:You are aware that this is a human only dating agency?

BARRY:Yes of course, just lovely tasty humans.

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That got an audible titter from me, which is unusual for me on here.
I think if you'd have maintained the course of a serial killer alien pretending to be a human it'd have been more to my taste, though possibly problematic given the show's timeslot.

That's about the next 2525 skit so far, nice, neat funny good lines and it really works within the limitations of radio.

But as Japi points out you kinda double back on yourself, in that Barry is a cannibal and then he's a letch. Also it lacks a good punch.

I was enjoying that playfull. What happened to the rest of it ; ) I also like the idea that he was eating all of them.

BARRY:Ah, nice girl, but a bit salty.

Made me chuckle.

I'd end it with him getting food poisoning from eating all his dates and it's like an old 80s AIDS don't die of ignorance advert.

Some very good lines in there. I agree that it would be better focused on just eating the dates, it gets a bit muddled 2/3 through. I alwasy find that writing skletches - they either feel too thin, or you end up taking an unecessary detour before the end.

It kind of reminded me of Rumbly's Pies, from Not The 9.00 News, which is a pretty good place to be.

I liked this too. Very nice, but no twist. Maybe the dating agency staff asks him on the date and you reveal she's a mutant eater and the whole dating agency was a fake to attract him in?

Thanks for all the positive feedback. Looks like everyone agrees I should have mined the date eating theme more fully. I did not realise that when writing.

And as to a twist BlahBlah (or can I call you Blah?) I was working on the fact that the woman being happy to overlook him being a human eating, shape shifting, mutant, alien was the twist. Did that not come across or was it revealed too early to be a twist?

From her line of questioning I assumed she knew from the start so the reveal didn't feel revealy enough IMHO

Quote: blahblah @ 29th January 2014, 1:26 AM GMT

From her line of questioning I assumed she knew from the start so the reveal didn't feel revealy enough IMHO

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Thanks. I will rework if there is another radio sketch show set 500 years in the future open door opportunity...

Nice, sharp dialogue with some good gags in there. Agree with the others that it needs a bit more focus and/or a twist.

I think the ending works fine. Closes the sketch and is a funny enough exit.