roscoff says it right that it's probably in too quick and the audience needs to see what his 'normal' life is like before he hears the voices but as a piece it makes me want to see where it all goes and I liked the jokes you used.
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Thanks George good advice, I'm thinking this piece needs big surgery to make small improvements
And George I award you new poster of the week award, for turning up heading straight into critique and giving thoughtful advice on other people's work.
Welcome to the show!
Quote: sootyj @ October 24 2013, 12:15 PM BSTAnd George I award you new poster of the week award,
Ahem.
I do not remember winning this. I even said I valued your opinion the other day.
Will provide you some proper critique this weekend Soots. Things a bit mad for me at the moment.
Well I didn't get it and I invented just now, so there.
Look forward to your feedback, as the electric guitar said to the cheap amp.
A true gentleman would invent an award for me on the spot in order to placate me.
Just saying.
You win the Sootyj dedicated time waster award, as I suspect you're right now in the middle of a mega big case, the judge is popping on his black cap and you're posting on BCG.