Quote: Tim Azure @ August 7 2013, 8:04 AM BSTStill don't get if you understood this. Do you still worry about not being discovered with your £1000 a month writing?
Bit of a shame writer Jennie doesn't seem to follow the Writing Opps threads...
As this is your second slightly snarky response I'm assuming you don't think the skits are upto much.
May I ask why?
Being discovered? I suppose I could interesting thought.
I've read them and they're very first draft, what I call "lobo ipsum" words where they're just saving space for better ones.
It's more that between the day job and the extra writing I don't really have the time for the forge a new career stuff.
So like the annoying suicider sitting on the motorway bridge and holding up traffic.
I still haven't made the decision to jump.
Though it would mean a little genteel poverty I quite like the idea of writing for the hell of it. I've a horror film script about a were dinner lady, a sketch show with the grumpy executioner. And yet I didn't even write anything for the last open opp on radio 4.
Time to start singing "I am what I am"
Quote: sootyj @ August 7 2013, 12:37 PM BSTI've read them and they're very first draft, what I call "lobo ipsum" words where they're just saving space for better ones.
They are better than that. You have two bang on brief ideas that just require the addition of a couple of really funny lines. I loved the 'Jubblies design' winning the noble prize
I liked the first one, I thought it attacked a good dystopian SF trope, but ended up with a sweet, 18.30 smily ending. Could do with a little poilish - and to change MOL to MOT, because that confused me, too - but it's good.
Didn't like number 2, I have to say. Can't really explain why, I just wasn't interested in that set up, so the hjokes just ticked themselves off, to me. I did, however, like the concept of a sexdroid winning high end awards, if it were me I'd make that thrust of the sketch - Nobel jubblies reminded me of Slartibartfast's fjords. 
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Quote: sootyj @ August 6 2013, 2:19 PM BSTThought I'd have a go, havent read BBC style in yonks. So doubt they're upto much but what the heck nothing ventured, nothing gained.
nb feel free to be as merciless as you like, I'm not great at BBC style stuff and it would be great to kick off some discussion on this new show.
1 MOL
VO
It is the year 2525 and the resources on planet earth are running out. The only wasteful resource left is our own lives and that is being rationed. Welcome to your MOL.FX A BUSY OFFICE PEOPLE BUSTLE AROUND
JEFF
Hello is this the right office, 27b?BOB
If you're names Jeff then it is! Take a seat make yourself at home, I'm Bob now have you heard read the holo leaflet about your MOL?JEFF
NoBOB
Telepathymail.JEFF
No I was thinking about getting a new pair of pants so sort of ignored it. Any way aren't I a little young for an MOL inspection I'm only 18.BOB
Used to be the case, everyone got 30 years before being recycled into biomass. But there were too many brilliant scientists getting squidged before their time and too many people who wee in tele-communicator booths living long past the point they were useful to anyone. It's all part of the govenrments new deal for killing and eating, unemployable young people.JEFF
Oh, you must be about 50. So what do you do?BOB
I've got a lovely, cheeky sense of humour. So long as I amuse 10 people a week I get to carryon, the wifes taken to spiking all our friends drinks with synthi-lemon juice to stop 'em grinning.JEFF SNIGGERS
BOB
Thanks for that mate, only another 8 this week to avoid being turned into Soylent purple.
Now let's crack on, do you have a job?JEFF
NoBOB
Friends?JEFF
Um I think my mum likes me.BOB
Not according to her sworn deposition, she asked if she said she didn't like you the cat could get an extra year.JEFF
Oh now you put it like that I haven't done much with my 18 years I might as well get stripped down to my very DNA and used as building material. My life has been a bit of a waste of time.BOB
That's the spirit, now just pop through that door I hear it doesn't hurt a bit.GRAMS
JEFF GETS UP AND OPENS A DOOR
SOUND OF PARTY POPPERS AND PEOPLE SAYING "Surprise" "Happy birthday"JEFF
Oh you guys, I knew I had friends this was all a surprise for my birthday. You even brought the cat, so if this is my birthday party where's the cake?BOB
You are, just pop through that door there son.2 THE CHANGE
VO
The 21st century prophet Lady of the Ga Ga preached of how she was not born a certain way, but what if you weren't built a certain way?GRAMS
A noisy workshop, machinery etc.TOM
Hello darlin' how can I help you? You certainly were built for pleasure cwoor.R356
I'd like some industrial tracks fitted, a mining laser and don't call me darling thank you.TOM
Um is this a wind up.R356
It most certainly is not. I may have been built a Sensuos modelb pleasure android, but deep down in my artificial intelligence circuits I've known my programming was different.TOM
But you're lovely; you're a perfect fusion of artificial flesh, machinery and your jubblies took 3 years to design and won a noble prize.R356
You just don't understand, you human males are all the same. Oh you're upsetting me so much, I wish I could cry.TOM
I could install some tear ducts if you like?R356
No that's not what I want. I may have the body of a weak and feeble pleasure android, but I have the heart of an industrial mining robot ready to carve out the mineral heart of distant planets.TOM STARTS TO CRY
R356
Why are you crying human?TOM
Because you're right, you'd be beautiful with a nuclear reactor and a jet pack. Atleast you'd be beautiful too me, I'll do the upgrade. Just one thing, when it's done can we see each other?R356
That could be difficult I'm seeing an industrial replicator, he's supporting me through the change.
Both ideas good. Keep polishing. (The sketches that is, not your knob.)
Quote: Carlos Manwelly @ August 6 2013, 9:58 PM BSTI have never checked, I am sure on a good sunny cloudless day, we should be able to.
Do you get good sunny cloudless days in wales?
Quote: FunyHaHA Not Funy Strange @ August 12 2013, 12:42 PM BSTDo you get good sunny cloudless days in wales?
We had one back in 1978 July the 24th it was. I only just about remember it myself but there are museums all over Wales celebrating that glorious day, there is even a campaign to get St Davids day moved to July the 24th, but the daffodil growers are not willing to budge.