Go check me out, and please let me know what you think about my routine. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yV6tjDIDOD4
Funny!
You're delivery attempts to say "Hey, I'm cool" but it falls flat because you fluff a lot of your lines and you don't enunciate with sufficient clarity.
And although I can enjoy a shaggy dog story, I'm not really keen on jokes about people shagging dogs.
Who are your favourite comedians? Whoever they are, I'll bet:
1/ You can understand what they're saying.
2/ They make you laugh.
It's a "no" from me, I'm afraid.
Are you in a cupboard, trying to make a video quietly so that the janitor doesn't find you? The mumbled tone makes it a little bit of an effort ot listen to, so you coudl work on that.
I'm afraid I didn't really like the jokes, they were sort of long, and the punchlines didn't justify that - some of these might work if they were snappy one-two gags, maybe.
Thank you both, I am going to be posting more of these and I will work on that. I understand what you're saying Stonked, I have noted everything you said, and I will be working on them. Gappy, I will work on that I will go to a more open and nice area, and I will speak louder. So I am going to list what I got out of your replies, and tell me if you have anything more to add.
-Speak louder, and more clearly.
-Say things so that people will understand them.
-Make the jokes quicker, like one-two and on to the next joke, more energetic joke telling.
Please add any further suggestions, and thank you both again, for intelligent, and helpful criticism.
Good man. Keep at it. 
I have to be honest if I walked past a cupboard and heard you recording, your sad soft voiced tail of bestiality.
I'd probably lock the door burn the building to the ground and take the first flight to Nepal.
Then hide up a mountain awaking screaming every night as I heard your voice in a nightmare where I am always the dog.
Maybe try another direction?
Yeah I got a lot of complaints on my material, I am definitely changing it up a bit. I am going another direction in the next episode.
Thats good to hear, I await your next project with interest,
Thank you! I am so happy that you wonderful people are being so helpful. I had imagined that everyone was just going to be insulting. But you guys genuinely want to help, and are giving only constructive criticism, the people on this site are great.
Ah this is the British Comedy Guide, the British Sarcasm Guide is a really awesome site,
no really it is.
I feel like your being sarcastic...but I'm not sure...