Thanks Teddy, your input is appreciated.
I completely agree re the opening scene and have returned to the original, with a few amendments.
You express your rationale very eloquently.
And as for the death threats - we can only hope. I actually think there is a lot to be said for a thread which gets a bit tetchy. Issues get thrashed out quickly in a productive and honest way.
I don't agree with all the advice I've received on this thread, but I have carefully considered it all and appreciate it all.
And come back, Marc, I'm sorry