YO!
So the other day I posted a video and got some really helpful feedback so thought I would do it again, thanks!
So this is some kind of comedy rap or poem. It's a little under delivered, but would love some feedback just to help me develop it toward something I can do live.
Thank you. The advice I get for the last one has been used.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lf0873F4Ptw&feature=youtu.be
All the best
Arron Ferguson
Thats awesome
you don't need the intro though it rocks on its own, very nice mixture of puns and rhymes
Funny and smart - I think I am starting to like you less & less...
Very good, if you are not getting paid to perform these - you should be.
Good luck with them.
playfull
Decent on so many levels
You're like a rapping Tim Minchin. There is some really good stuff in this, although I think you are better than the subject matter - why stick to women and sex when you could say so much more?
Mind you, there isn't a woman alive who could resist a man describing himself as a "postman delivering to your womb".
Hi guys! Thank you so much for the comments, really great and helpful thanks! Please do link to anything you've done so I can watch!
And hey Jennie! I wanted to do something about women and sex just 'cause it seemed quite fitting of the hip-hop culture I was trying to explore. But I've done similar stuff that explores different areas, maybe this one would be more your cup of tea:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UBKQLnQB4dQ
Anyway.. thank you very much for humouring me... And like I said, please link me up if anybody has "content" floating around
=D =D
-Arron Ferguson x
Ah - I get it. I hadn't seen any of your other stuff.
You are very good. Keep getting it out there and things are bound to take off for you. Good luck 
Thank you very much Jennie! All the best!
And no playful- noone is paying me. Don't suppose you want to fix that 
Arron x
Nice man, the title is great, but I thought there would be more reference to puddings.
How about "Eton Messed up" for the follow up?