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EXTERNAL - DAY - PARK BENCH - A MAN IS SITTING DOWN EATING A CHOCOLATE BAR, AN OLD WOMAN WALKS BY AND SITS NEXT TO THE MAN.

THE OLD WOMAN IS STARING AT THE MAN AS HE IS EATING THE CHOCOLATE. THE MAN NOTICES SHE IS WATCHING HIM EATING.

THE MAN GESTURES TO THE OLD WOMAN OFFERING HER A BIT OF CHOCOLATE.

Man: Would you like a bit

Old woman: I really shouldn't, not after the last time

Man: It will be ok a little bit won't hurt I am sure

Old woman: Ok , but make sure you wear a condom, and no sticking your finger up my arse again, my piles have been playing me up something awful since the last time.

Tripe.

Quote: Shandonbelle @ July 27 2013, 8:40 PM BST

Tripe.

I agree, there is no doubt that it is the the rubbery lining of the stomach of cattle or other ruminants, used as food.

I suppose technically this is a joke, but its rather unpleasant.

Quote: AngieBaby @ July 28 2013, 8:14 AM BST

I suppose technically this is a joke, but its rather unpleasant.

Thanks Angiebaby, I don't usually write this type of crap, but I wanted to try it out, I set out for it to be unpleasant and shocking.

Well you definitely achieved your goal. Congratulations.

I don't agree Angie, it wouldn't be shocking on a primary school play ground... or funny come to that. But Carlos if you don't write this sort of 'crap' usually and you know it is crap, why post it? What do you want?

Quote: Carlos Manwelly @ July 28 2013, 10:06 AM BST

Thanks Angiebaby, I don't usually write this type of crap, but I wanted to try it out, I set out for it to be unpleasant and shocking.

Unpleasant and shocking isn't a goal in itself though. Try interesting, unpleasant and shocking.

Quote: Marc P @ July 28 2013, 9:43 PM BST

I don't agree Angie, it wouldn't be shocking on a primary school play ground... or funny come to that. But Carlos if you don't write this sort of 'crap' usually and you know it is crap, why post it? What do you want?

I just like writing

Quote: Jennie @ July 28 2013, 9:58 PM BST

Unpleasant and shocking isn't a goal in itself though. Try interesting, unpleasant and shocking.

thank you Jennie, I really have taken all the feedback on board and I appreciate it really

Quote: Carlos Manwelly @ July 28 2013, 10:08 PM BST

I just like writing

Spraying rude words on wall is writing Carlos. If you want to put it out for proper evaluation do the courtesy of affording your audience that respect that you yourself would like to be given.

Quote: Marc P @ July 28 2013, 10:18 PM BST

Spraying rude words on wall is writing Carlos. If you want to put it out for proper evaluation do the courtesy of affording your audience that respect that you yourself would like to be given.

Thanks again Marc I get it message understood.

Good man look forward to your next offering then! :)

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