British Comedy Guide

Porno

A quicky.

PORNO
 
Int. Busy bar . Middle-aged guy is chatting up an attractive voluptuous blonde .
 
Guy
 
No, really , you're easily the most attractive lady in here . You are !
 
 
Blonde
 
Get away with you ! You say that to all the girls . You're making me blush.
 
Guy
 
On my dear old mum's life ! You're fantastic!
 
Blonde
 
Thanks.  You're not bad yourself !
 
Guy
 
Oh you! Flatterer!
 
Pause
 
Can I be very very cheeky?
 
Blonde
 
I'm sure you can.
 
Guy
 
No seriously . Have you ...
 
Moves closer to her
 
...ever fancied ...
 
Moves closer still
 
...doing a...
 
up to her ear.
 
 ...porno?
 
Blonde
 
Me? I'm not nearly talented enough for that.
 
Guy
 
You are! Less of the false modesty . You're very talented .
 
Blonde
 
That's very kind of you . I've been asked a few times before...
 
Guy
 
I'll bet you have !
 
Blonde
 
What?
 
Guy
 
I'm not surprised with your obvious ...talent.
 
Blonde
 
OK. In for a penny in for a pound  . Let's go!
 
Cuts to bedroom .
The guy is on all fours on the bed while the blonde is filming him .
 
Come on , darling ! Work that body ! Stick that arse out!
The guy obliges.
That's it sweetheart , you're getting the idea .
Now , spread those legs , you little minx!
 
Fades
 
 
 
 

Very good. :D

I disagree with stonked.

I agree with Angiebaby.

Jaicee youve an unusually good ear for dialogue, your pacing and structure are excellent

But your actual sketches seem to alternate between the obvious and the unpleasant

You really need to work on developing some actually funny ideas

If the joke is that he is asking her to film the porno, rather than be in it, then when she says 'yes' he should just hand her a huge camera and a big lighting rig from out of shot and unzip his trousers.

Now that's funny! :D

Quote: Godot Taxis @ July 27 2013, 12:57 PM BST

If the joke is that he is asking her to film the porno, rather than be in it, then when she says 'yes' he should just hand her a huge camera and a big lighting rig from out of shot and unzip his trousers.

I concur that's an excellent twist punch

Godot why don't u write comedy?

For the same reason you lot don't and because I've got a cab.

you missed out the r and the s there in cab

I think Godot's suggestion makes it more succinct and funnier.

It is still a weak gag though.

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